Shepherd: Plastic (please comment on my new song)

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Shepherd: Plastic (please comment on my new song)

#1 Post by Shepherd » 25 Apr 2011 04:23

Here is the fourth song I have finished writing for my project Shepherd entitled "Plastic". Please take a listen and comment if you wish. It's melodic thrash/black metal.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YqytOBp6A00

Plastic:
The time in which we live
Can be like any other
The blood is still red
And the body must be fed
But what can I say?
Of the world today
The plastic in our lives
Has it made a better way?

No……
It’s cold and frozen like ice
You’ll…..
Embrace the illusion in your eyes

Fake defiles
With no pain
It creates a man behind who I am.
Someone I can believe in.
Someone you can connect to.

Maturation escapes the human mind
Generations beneath our wasted time
Moderation another technologic crime
Gravitated towards an unreal life

Sad world
Sets possessions high
I am a slave
Deep down inside it seems so strange
I don’t mind this cage

This is not a dream
Although it’s hard to feel
I’m losing my sense
As my mind starts to reel
So what will I pay?
For who I am today
The plastic in our lives
Does it really take away?

Know……
Life exists amidst
You…….
Can you tell without your shell?

What enslaves destroys
Earth mind and soul
Carving out a whole
Never to be filled

Generation of complication
Revelation of plasticization

Has made me……Blind

Sad world
Sets possessions high
I am a slave
Deep down inside it seems so strange
I don’t mind this cage

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Re: Shepherd: Plastic (please comment on my new song)

#2 Post by innerdream » 26 Apr 2011 18:26

the vocals aren't my kind of thing to be honest but the music is absolutely fantastic - great stuff

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Re: Shepherd: Plastic (please comment on my new song)

#3 Post by Narmoth: » 11 Sep 2011 21:44

I think I will second Innerdream: clean vocals would better fit the music.
But the rest is quite good. Good luck with this project!
check out my band:
heavy metal / melodic death from Northern Norway
http://www.facebook.com/dreamslain


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